Wise, Witty, and Wacky Wednesday


I’ve decided to do the first campaign challenge for my Wednesday blog- the rules are below. I’ve never done any flash fiction because my grammar is so poor I get horribly nervous posting anything that hasn’t been reviewed several times over- but I don’t have a blog for today so here we go 🙂

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open” These four words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)

For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!

The door swung open. For a moment Zopher wondered whether this was a good idea. The room was disgusting. Filth and vermin covered every surface. The young man he’d come for shook as he knelt naked on the floor, his bruised, yellow, body barely more then a skeleton.
Zopher stepped out of the light and into Scott Hillman’s personal hell. “Could you please put the syringe down so we may speak?”
Blood-shot eye slowly raised, taking in Zopher’s translucent form. “Am I already dead?” Scott pulled the rusted needle from his arm, leaving a trickle of blood.
Zopher smiled and knelt on the floor. “No you are not, although your soul cries out for death.”
“I do. I want to die.”
“I have a deal for you. Let me have your life.”
“Like a vampire?”
Zopher chuckled. “No, Scott. I will enter your body and you will walk through that doorway. I will accept all your karma from this life, and you will move on.”
“Will it hurt?”
“Do it.”
Zopher slid into the body. As pain and stench assaulted him Zopher wondered if he’d made the right choice, but it was too late. The door swung shut.

Here it is- hope you enjoying, and it’s exactly 200 words.

Okay I couldn’t leave you without something wacky- so here is a literal video- if you haven’t seen these before I hope you enjoy it- it cracked me up.

52 responses »

  1. Hi Alica!

    I have to be honest, only read your flash fiction up to the word “vermin.” (I promise to check it out later.) I’m eating dinner while I catch up on my blog reading. I watched the literal video, however, and it was HYSTERICAL! Thanks so much for making my Wednesday more wacky and wonderful. 😛

  2. Its an interesting story, thanks for posting it on FB and it IS good, I am too embarrassed to mention I wrote a story for the Campaign on Fb, just too scared,
    I also like the name of your blog . 🙂

  3. An unusual story. …great entry for the challenge.

    Would like to invite you to The Rule of Three Blogfest —a month-long extravaganza in the fictional town of Renaissance this October, with some great prizes, comment love, and of course, a lot of exposure for your writing.

    Zopher and Scott could come to the town of Renaissance, and fit right in! 🙂

  4. First of all, I love the name Zopher — a perfect fit for a character as strange and as curious as he is! There’s a grittiness to this story that I approve of. I love reading dirty, earthy fiction!

    Good work, Alica! Don’t be nervous about showing the world your writing — that’s the only way any of us will ever get better. 🙂

  5. HI, Alica,

    I really enjoyed your story…. Since I am a judge, I gently want to point out there were a few grammar errors. However, your story did make my top five list. Congratulations, and good luck with the rest of the challenge.

    • Thank you so much for looking past my grammar- it is my greatest weakness- would I be able to fix it beofre the final round of judging? I am thrilled to be chosen either way, and I’ll have someone look over my work before I post next time.

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